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Summer Jane, Pt. 1 by ~Clippers0507:iconClippers0507:



The pants weren't tight enough
but her hips still filled the spaces
with curves and thoughts of sex
as she strolled past necks
craning to get a better view.

She wasn't a pole dancer
but she could seduce with
her smile first, her charm last
between supple breast
poking through shirts
or trying to break free.

  The girls called her a slut,
  the boys wanted to call her
their lover
  and she never knew what
  she wanted, waking to
  a morning of Supposes,
looking at the world in
contempt or envy,
screaming at the sunbeams;

they were just always too perfect,
too straight, too bright - equating
with optimism. Her happiness
   was him or him, whoever
told her they loved her
atop her terrace or under a kitchen
moonlit shadow - lovely darkness,
hiding all flaws,
kissing moonbeams and dry
lips, running hands across
chiseled chest, or bellies
forgetting what crunches were.

Mama said I shouldn't
get mixed up with
fast women
  but she
snatched my heart up quick,
didn't have a
chance to object, found
my toothbrush next to hers too quick and

my wit, my wit seemed to
pull itself away - she
outwitted my sensibilities and lust was too fascinating.
Simply astounding, her
scent, her breast, her
eyes were too fascinating.

Nothing mattered.
©2008-2009 ~Clippers0507
:iconclippers0507:

Author's Comments

~flings, things on chest, and shallow breaths; we're going no where~

I almost missed today's submission! I know :iconlovetodeviate: said we can post them retroactively, I really just wanted to actually do it right everyday. This shall be a series of poems... not sure where it's going yet, but enjoy for now. :D

Poem Five, Day Five

Listening to: Weather To Fly - Elbow - A beautiful song

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:iconbohemianpoets:
wow. for now all i can say is Epic.
and i know i'm behind on so many comments and work of yours i'm attending to it right now :hug:

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"Wake up! just close your eyes.. i wanted to tell you, i think i'm ready, i'm ready to free fall in the unknown."-Bohemianpoets.
:iconclippers0507:
I need to finish this! I'm glad SOMEONE commented on this. I thought I went off the deep end writing this one. Always the supportive one. :heart: :hug:

--
My boy, if silence is golden, you are bankrupt. -
Charlie Chan
:iconbohemianpoets:
i know! i felt it! gah! i love what your writing these days. :hug:

--
"Wake up! just close your eyes.. i wanted to tell you, i think i'm ready, i'm ready to free fall in the unknown."-Bohemianpoets.
:iconsantanaclaws:
I've finally found a writer that I'd love to watch. Which is exactly what I will do. :)
I'm a writer but I haven't written since last year because chaos engulfed my life but this poem at the least reminded me that it's the way we use words to paint a picture or a character or a human tendency that makes writing beautiful. Which is what I got from this poem.

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04:55:25 pm <santanaclaws> I'm sorry, english syntax. :(
04:55:28 pm <santanaclaws> I'm
04:55:29 pm <j2n4me> a claw machine
04:55:29 pm <j2n4me> filled with words
:iconclippers0507:
OMG. I'm SO glad someone actually got something from this piece. I thought it was gonna be lost forever. lol Glad you like this and inspired you! :D Please start writing again, too. Writing is such a wonderful gift everyone has. :hug:

--
My boy, if silence is golden, you are bankrupt. -
Charlie Chan

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